tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-378441400441702936.post7782725627748312038..comments2024-02-16T03:28:53.170-05:00Comments on Picture This!: A Pitch That WorkedRob Sandershttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05189999418618335098noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-378441400441702936.post-88287283894332739372012-03-14T15:23:32.260-04:002012-03-14T15:23:32.260-04:00Laura, I love the pitch! And I think it tells enou...Laura, I love the pitch! And I think it tells enough to get noticed. You might add a sentence or two that introduces us to the characters (if they have names), or shows the theme, or teases us a bit more. For instance: "Frank and Franz end up sweet from their green toes to their bugged-out eyes, can they hop their way out of this sticky situation? Or are they stuck with their chocolate luck?Rob Sandershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05189999418618335098noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-378441400441702936.post-17650759276492589032012-03-14T15:05:51.442-04:002012-03-14T15:05:51.442-04:00Hi Rob. This is a wonderful site. I'm so glad ...Hi Rob. This is a wonderful site. I'm so glad that I stumbled onto it. Here's a pitch I've been working on.<br /><br />When three fat frogs hop into a chocolate factory, they slurp and burp and belly flop from one mess to another, 'til they end up on display... for sale!<br /><br />The pitch doesn't include why the frogs are there or how they get out... but do you think it's enough?<br /><br />Thanks. :)<br />LauraLaurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01579735751111262768noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-378441400441702936.post-19258261465751235142012-03-12T13:16:12.499-04:002012-03-12T13:16:12.499-04:00Sharon, this is a terrific elevator pitch. I truly...Sharon, this is a terrific elevator pitch. I truly think upon hearing this someone would say, "Oh, I want to know more!" Good job!Rob Sandershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05189999418618335098noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-378441400441702936.post-37633336060618211842012-03-11T21:50:03.109-04:002012-03-11T21:50:03.109-04:00ok...i'll bite...After knitting wooly sweaters...ok...i'll bite...After knitting wooly sweaters for the entire farm, an exhausted Mrs. Cow resorts to yarn shopping when she gets a call from the now chilly sheep. Can Ewemingdales help?Sharon Stanleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15932054869101408424noreply@blogger.com